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The Very Last Lie by ~cheetohXD:iconcheetohXD:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Narrative > Open


She pulls out a slip
Hands it gently to the doctor
The doctor frowns and shoves it away

Momma starts to cry
Sister looks you in the eyes
Tells you that you're old enough to see

They grab you by the hands
Trying to make you understand
There was nothing you could ever do but pray

You start to turn away
Look him in his pale face
Grab his hand before he slips away

You douse out his sorrows
Tell him to wait for tommorow
Promise he'll get better
But you know it's a lie

At his funeral you sigh
You've tried, but just can't cry
He did it to himself you think
As you kiss his grave goodbye
©2007-2009 ~cheetohXD
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Author's Comments

Not quite sure what to put for poetry, but this has happened to me, and i told him the very last lie he heard. I realized try as i might, i can't draw, but maybe I'll succed in writing? comments are welcome, critiscm, anything... poetry=mine

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~luismorton Apr 13, 2007, 6:57:01 PM
wow, this one was really powerful, is just full of feelings and those feelings and sentiments. But also is really clean and easy to read.

Congrats.

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"life is nothing but a short dream" By; Jorge Luis Morton Gtz
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~RoccondilRinon Apr 13, 2007, 6:58:21 PM
I love this. The title says it all, really. It happened to you? :hug: Beautiful poetry, expresses its intent perfectly.

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It's all rather confusing, really.
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~cheetohXD Apr 13, 2007, 7:00:02 PM
thank you! yes it did happen, when i was 10 *damn my life suxXD* thankie for the fave! :hug:

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Mood: Wow! ~RoccondilRinon Apr 13, 2007, 7:00:27 PM
*looks at your userpage* Nearly 13? I took this for the work of an adult. Well done indeed! You will go very far if you want to.

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It's all rather confusing, really.
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~cheetohXD Apr 13, 2007, 7:00:52 PM
thankies! :hug:

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~cheetohXD Apr 13, 2007, 7:03:04 PM
thank you! *is hating current age of 12*only 3 more months! *fumeage* i got a sketchbook, but i only write in it!XD so i guess i have a lot of practice, thank you so much! :hug:

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~GaaraisHotXD Apr 14, 2007, 7:49:26 AM
You showed me tis on Thursday!

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Me: Hey Gaara, hey Gaara wake up!
Chi chan: Yeah Gaara u silly Sleppy head wake up!
Gaara: Uuh...oh god u guys. This better be freaken important is the village on fire?
Chi chan: No Gaara we found a map to candy mountain!
Me: yeah Candy mountain!
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~crazygreywolf Apr 14, 2007, 12:53:58 PM
My gawd, joo wrote this. <33333 :hug:
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~cheetohXD Apr 14, 2007, 2:34:08 PM
Yes, i did... is it that bad? *is paranoid* cause i... can.. uhh, fix it... you know, if you want... *is sweating* is it hot in here? i'm gonna go jump out that window to buy some icecream...XDDDDDDDD

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